Electric Eye

[Nihilio]

Είδος: επιστημονική φαντασία

Βία; Όχι

Σεξ; Όχι

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Αυτοτελής; Ναι

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- So, Eric, why don't you tell me about open spaces.

- Tell you what, doctor?

- About open spaces in general. Or about how you feel when you are in an open space...

- It feels... fine. I guess...

- You... guess?

- Yes, doctor. Open spaces are.. kinda alright... It is the open sky that, ehm, worries me.

- Why does the open sky worry you, Eric?

- Well, it is sort of... you people tell me it is paranoia, but I know you are just ignorant fools!

- That is a very strong word, fools. What is it that we don't know, Eric?

- You think I am crazy, don't you?

- Let's not jump to hasty conclusions, Eric. No, I don't "think" you are "crazy". I am here in order to help you better your life.

- Right. Right. You are a fucking shrink, are you not? THEY send me here so I can be interrogated by a fascist like you! Ain't gonna happen!

- Them? Who are them?

- THEY brought me here! THEY brought me here, because I was about to tell everybody about the EYE!

- The... eye? What do you mean by that term, Eric?

- THEY tell nothing to their stooges? The EYE in the fucking SKY!

- Tell me more about this eye, please...

- Oh, right, now the MASKS are SLIPPING! I will tell you all I know. THEY should be afraid, because I am not the only one!

- Tell me, please, when did you find out about this EYE?

- I just knew. One day it just came to me. I constantly felt as if I was watched when I was in open spaces. I just felt somebody hav been watching me. And suddenly I knew there was a satellite in the SKY watching me. Watching US. Keeping all sorts of data, pictures, videos and all. A satellite hidden with super stealth technologies.

- Did you find any proof of that?

- Sure I did. It was hard to get there, but I did. There is a moment every month that the satellite passes in front of the moon. Then you can see it.

- I see... And do you have any hard copy of that?

- A video. It is at a safe place. Actually, what time is it?

- It is four thirty.

- Then you can see it. It is already on the internet. I had someone trusty to do so in case THEY gotten to me.

- What makes you say that?"

- What do you mean? I trust that person. That PERSON will do it.

- I am afraid not, Eric. Your pal was very worried about your ravings and turned that blank DVD in when you got arrested.

- But...

- Were I to believe your theories, I would say had specific instructions to do so. I would say the video is safe with us. As fot you, the diagnosis seems obvious: since you feel that an eye from the sky is watching you, we will keep you off its sight forever...

Edited August 22, 2011 by Nihilio

[Oberon]

Ωραίο φλασάκι και με ωραίο τέλος. Μ'άρεσε το πώς έδωσες πολλές πληροφορίες μέσα από ένα διάλογο χωρίς σε κανένα σημείο να γίνεται info dumping και κάθε πληροφορία προωθούσε την πλοκή και ενέτεινε το ρυθμό της ιστορίας.

 

Έχει κάποια μικρά λαθάκια εδώ και κει στα Αγγλικά - τα οποία γράφεις εκπληκτικά όπως και να έχει και το ξέρεις ήδη - ή κάποιες μικρές ασυνέπειες στη γλώσσα. Θα σε ενδιέφερε να στα πω; (Μπορώ να το κάνω και στο Skype βέβαια, αν το προτιμάς).

Edited August 22, 2011 by Oberon

[Nirgal]

Nice. Poor little Eric should be more careful. He was eager to disclose info to the shrink like a real crazy person, although I almost believed him. Bye, bye, Eric.

 

Τα σχόλια στην αγγλική επιτρέπονται;

[Mors Planch]

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