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Rikochet

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The tears that

run richly, freely,

on elegant cheeks

are the ones that watched

the heartache grow

They,

they are the ones that saw

the heartache's death.

 

Desire that

which waits,

sprawled,

another weed

from the soil where

Heaven shat.

 

Aesthetics drop

unconscious,

for it is a vile,

revolting sight -

The right

of the freeman

to take what he will.

 

I am stripped of my pride

for (my) desire knows no confines

and I am always left

unquenched.

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  • 2 weeks later...

Πώς μου ξέφυγε αυτό Ρικκς;

Μου ξέφυγε.

Ο τελευταίος στίχος της δεύτερης στροφής σε συνδυασμό με τον πρώτο της τρίτης είναι ιδιοφυής! Πετάς το... σκατό, και μετά μας λες πως έπεσαν τα aesthetics. Σχεδόν μας ειρωνεύεσαι - και νομίζω πως μας αρέσει κιόλας!

Οι λέξεις σου όπως πάντα χτυπούν και καμπανίζουν, γράφεις πράγματα που κάποιος μπορεί να θυμάται για καιρό.

Το ποίημα είναι μια ολοκληρωμένη ενότητα, δεν αφήνεις τίποτε να κρέμεται. Ακόμα και αν κάτι είναι συναίσθημα μιας στιγμής, εσύ του δίνεις αίγλη συμπεράσματος...

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